Thursday, April 16, 2009

EXP - 1 FEEDBACKS

The intention of publishing the feedback below is so that all students can benefit by understanding the strengths and weaknesses of a range of projects. Please take the time to review other student's work with these comments in mind. If you have any questions or would like any further clarification don’t hesitate to ask me during the studio session.

Ashneil
No Show.

Barno
Key strength of the scheme:
Dynamic composition of the spaces and the animation captures it. The “circulation loop” starting from the underground horizontal space strings all the volumetric “objects” together. Good + simple strategy that works.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Presentation of your works. You must scan your sketches! The animations havn’t shown the process of your design development.

Belle
Key strength of the scheme:
The fluidity of imagination and the joyfulness in the making of space. The Gallery serves as the meeting point for two curvy motifs: one compressed and one floating. All these demonstrate that you have great potential in design.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Editing, if any. Animation 4 moves too hastily and needs a narrative structure. Animation 2 + 3 could be edited into one sequence.

Berlen
Key strength of the scheme:
The imagination and integration of spaces into one continuous experience in the landscape with a sense of control and joyfulness. Excellent line work in all sketches paired by thematic varieties.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
I would like to see more development in the interiority of space: the positioning of the body, the definition of the micro-environment, the contrast between inside and outside. This concern for interiority can also help you edit down the over-scaled final project.

Diarne
Key strength of the scheme:
Show process of development. Sketches of section & texture are intense, creative and show enough varieties.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Haven’t taken the more challenging sketchUp 3D model, showing a partial hemisphere, for final development. The 2nd animation shows incomplete sectional view. More focus on the development of an idea.

DK Fawad
Key strength of the scheme:
Persistent in design development by perfecting the use of SketchUp tools. Boldness in spatial conception. The animated sequence for stair is a very beautiful experience in space.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Integration of spatial sequence with the volumetric objects. Lack understanding of what constitutes inside and outside in architecture. It is a common problem among first year students.

Ella
Key strength of the scheme:
Transformation from model 1 to 2: from rectilinear composition to curvaceous volumetric formation. Persistence in the attempt to master 3D modelling skills. Strong sense of beauty when it comes to the overall composition of objects.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The architectonic aspects of the final project are not clear at all: inside/outside, form/space, structure/partition. These are common problems for 1st year students. The animations need better narrative structure and organization.

Henry
Key strength of the scheme:
Great sensibility in constructing the ambience of the spaces through texture and colour. The movement bit of the representation is fluid and sophisticated in “Walking in the Studio” animation.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Integration between the total-view object and its internal micro-environment is lacking. Line quality of sketches in general needs improvement.

Irene
Key strength of the scheme:
The stair has been developed in detail and effectively situated into your project. The ambience of the interior spaces is well represented by textures and the artworks exhibited. The texture sketches show various patterns and they are imaginative.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Animations lack structure and are in need of steady procession. The design development bit of the experiment is weak and you need to take a more ambitious approach for your next experiment. The sectional sketches lack alternative. Otherwise, a good 1st submission

Jazy
Key strength of the scheme:
With persistence and perseverance, your pursue for a better solution has been productive. The structural composition of the above ground space is impressive showing dynamic composition and rich materiality. The stairs are meticulously studied and represented.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The connection between above and below ground studios is at a rudimentary stage and needs further integration. This is a common problem for the 1st year student.

Katy
Key strength of the scheme:
Sensitive to shapes and in creating appealing objects with different materialities. The formal imagination is rich. Good studies of stairs.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The 3 animations show incomplete interior views and often they morphed into sectional procession that creates confusion. Must learn how to structure your visual narrative and sequence by using Storyboard technique. Line quality needs improvement in all sketches. Overall spatial integration is lacking and that is a common issue for all students in our group.

Keena
Key strength of the scheme:
Elegant and composed in the creation of objects. Beautiful sketches with great care in line quality. The interior spaces show highly effective use of textures. Capable of design development.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Lack ambition in further experimenting your ideas and possibilities in space regardless of a strong start. The animations need editing and better visual structure.

Maria
Key strength of the scheme:
The colour scheme and application of textures in the interior spaces are effective. Details rendered on the walls for display add quality to the gallery space. Texture sketches are carefully drawn up and show enough varieties.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Haven’t explored the spatial possibility for stairs. They are employed mainly a s a functional object in your project instead of a device to create spatial events through movement. The “stacking” of 3 spaces into 1 object is too simplistic and lineal.

Michael
Key strength of the scheme:
Boldness in idea and representation. There is a strong focus in the compositional aspect of the project in both options. All the elements in the project: rooms, stairs, levels, front & back, object in landscape; were tightly woven together forming a properly scaled “building”. Sectional sketches are well rendered and each shows some aspects of architectonic possibility.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Not ambitious enough in the experimentation. You’ve chosen the more “static” model for final development. Need to explore the dynamic aspect in space by way of movement. Need more “patterning” in texture sketches.

Miller X
Key strength of the scheme:
Structural boldness and fluid movement in the final project.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The descriptive aspects in EXP-1: your chosen words were not fully integrated into your project and hadn’t been clearly documented and followed through in the developmental process. This has contributed to the singular result in your final project: megastructure; and lacking further articulation of the spaces it has brought forth.

Natalie
Key strength of the scheme:
Overall presentation and organization in your uploads are strong and comprehensive. The process of design development has been well documented. Texture sketches are beautifully executed with lots of varieties. A rather challenging approach to bring in landscape as part of the experiment.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The integration between the built-object, ground level, surrounding landscape and the underground spaces. Some of the images show great potential but they are under-developed. The objects need to “open up” at certain juncture for better spatial result. This is a general tendency for 1st year students. You can improve your design “tool box” by studying more canonical cases.

Nick
Key strength of the scheme:
The attempt to “texturize” everything! Creative application of software to achieve particular result in stair exercise. The quality and variety in texture sketches.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Lacking vigour in the developmental aspect of your project. SketchUp has been used more as a drawing device instead of the vehicle to explore spatial possibilities. The sectional sketches lack architectonic connotation. Too much focus on the 2D aspects of the experiment. The animation upload has been shrinked!

Patrick D
Key strength of the scheme:
Effective application of textures as shown in the 3rd captured images.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Total lack of engagement with the process. The application of SketchUp in both the development and visualization of your final project is at the rudimentary level. Need to spend more time in mastering the skills in drawing and design development.

Patrick S
Key strength of the scheme:
The overall presentation and organization of the uploads are highly successful and comprehensive. The whole project is well composed, developed and imaginatively rendered: the colours, textures and the sequence of movement in spaces. Sketches show great variety in patterns and care in line work. The 3 animations have employed 3 kinds of viewing process to present the final project instead of just another repetition of the same.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Haven’t explored the possibilities to integrate your 3 spaces in a dynamic way. For instance, breaking up the complex interlocking sub-bits contained in a “box” at the above ground level, and by inserting a system of walkways, steps and platforms, you can create an “organism” instead of the present “squatting” rectilinear box.

Sarah
Key strength of the scheme:
Playful and sophisticated design in stairs, especially the one at the underground space leading to the in-between gallery: the scale, its spatial potentiality, extended motifs of “step” as multi-purpose fixtures in space. One of the rear cases that have taken “ascending” theatrically.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The balance between volume and mass at the upper level. The 3 conjoined doughnut shape volumes have been arbitrarily put together.

Serena
Key strength of the scheme:
Meticulousness in texture sketches and the highly dramatic application of them in the interior spaces. Sketched out different approaches in the conception of stair.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The general solution for this project is overtly one track minded and lack alternatives. The animated “boxes” of space lacks architectonic elements: wall + floor thickness, proper openings, relations between inside and outside. More spatial experimentation in your next EXP!

Tri
Key strength of the scheme:
Strong sensitivity in graphic design. The overall uploads are measured and sophisticated in spatial organization and design. The texture sketches are one of the best in terms of their line quality and varieties. The red “ribbon” like element ties the 3 levels of space together both structurally and symbolically. This is a good solution without imposing an overwhelming scale in the final project.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Could be more ambitious and exploring more detailed relationship between inside and outside of a constructed object.

1 comment:

  1. Thank you for the feedback Shaowen! This gave me a diff perspective on my work. This will help a lot for the next assignment

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